The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparison where relevant

The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparison where relevant
The aim of
this
report is to analyse Asian
countries
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country's
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population
in cities statistics between 1970 and 2020 with predictions for
next
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the next
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20 years and provide a summary.
Overall
as
it
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can be clearly seen from the graph all the
countries
experienced a growth of inhabitants. Malaysia holds the highest points
most
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of the mentioned period. Starting in 1970 only
Philippines
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the Philippines
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exceeded Malaysia's city
residants
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residents
but the percentage is almost insignificant. The same thing repeats 20 years later
,
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when the
population
of the
Philippines
jumped by nearly
a
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half of
last
year's records.
However
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in the period between 1990 and
2010
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2010,
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the
country
lost over 10% of its citizens. During
this
time, Malaysia’s
population
rocketed and by 2020 reached
the
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first place, surpassing the next
country
by almost a third. That
country
is Indonesia. With four times more citizens than in 1970, in 2010
it’s
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its
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population
surpassed the
Philippines
and kept on increasing. The steadiest growth of
population
happened in Thailand between 1990 and 2020. Comparing all of these graphs,
it is clear that
Malaysia has the most residents and probably will in the future.
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the smallest
country
by its inhabitants is Thailand, now having just above half of Malaysia’s number. In the
future
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future,
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only Thailand and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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will grow
fastly
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and other
countries
are believed to have a more stable
population
size. Generally, in the
last
50 years Asian region
is
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has been
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getting larger by its citizens,
however
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however,
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some
countries
like the
Philippines
have experienced
decline
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a decline
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. From the year 2000
overall
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the overall
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population
is
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has been
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growing
fastly
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fast
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, last, overall".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, population, philippines, country with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • percentage
  • population
  • growth trend
  • significant periods
  • comparison
  • implications
  • starting point
  • predicted levels
  • rapid urbanization
  • slow urbanization
  • stability
  • urban population
  • prediction
  • comparison
  • highlighting
  • significant
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