The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparison where relevant

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report is to analyse Asian

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countries

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population

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in cities statistics between 1970 and 2020 with predictions for

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the next

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20 years and provide a summary.

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can be clearly seen from the graph all the

countries

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experienced a growth of inhabitants. Malaysia holds the highest points

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of the mentioned period. Starting in 1970 only

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Philippines

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exceeded Malaysia's city

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but the percentage is almost insignificant. The same thing repeats 20 years later

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when the

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of the

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jumped by nearly

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half of

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year's records.

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in the period between 1990 and

2010

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the

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lost over 10% of its citizens. During

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time, Malaysia’s

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rocketed and by 2020 reached

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first place, surpassing the next

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by almost a third. That

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is Indonesia. With four times more citizens than in 1970, in 2010

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population

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surpassed the

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and kept on increasing. The steadiest growth of

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happened in Thailand between 1990 and 2020. Comparing all of these graphs,

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Malaysia has the most residents and probably will in the future.

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the smallest

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by its inhabitants is Thailand, now having just above half of Malaysia’s number. In the

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only Thailand and

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Philippines

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will grow

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and other

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are believed to have a more stable

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size. Generally, in the

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50 years Asian region

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getting larger by its citizens,

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however

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some

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like the

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have experienced

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. From the year 2000

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population

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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