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The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparison where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparison where relevant.
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The aim of
this
 report is to discuss the division between the percentage of
population
 in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 and predictions for 2030 and 2040. The data in
this
 chart is divided not only by the amount of
population
 in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia but
also
 by a
period
 of 50
years
.
Overall
, there is a clear division between
people’s
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people
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 living in cities of four countries. It can be seen from the graph that
Malaysian
people
 make up the largest
population
with
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apply
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being just above other lines all the time and even predictions are prone to believe in their upward trend. The significant drop
of
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in
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Malaysian
 citizens happened in 2000 when the line rocketed almost a third and it reached a percentage of 90%. Meanwhile, the inhabitants of the Philippines were only in 1990 just across the
Malaysian
population
 and it can be noted that
people
 of
this
 country were the only
one
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ones
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 when their
population
 plunged by 5% in
this
period
 of 10
years
.
Moreover
, as can be clearly seen from the graph, the numbers of
people
 living in cities of four countries display a more dynamic position in the
period
 of 50
years
 and especially from 2030 to 2040 there are forecasts of
population’s
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population
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 growth
further
.
However
, the figures are given that compared to other lines the Thailand
people
’s amount will remain steady in the future.
In contrast
, in the
period
 of 50
years
 natives of Malaysia have had a more dramatic drop than others. Generally,
although
 all the percentages of
population
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the population
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 seemed to be positive in dynamic positions, the
amount
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number
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 of
Malaysian
people
 have a bigger predisposition to
variete
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variety
 in huge percentages.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, period, years, malaysian, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • percentage
  • population
  • growth trend
  • significant periods
  • comparison
  • implications
  • starting point
  • predicted levels
  • rapid urbanization
  • slow urbanization
  • stability
  • urban population
  • prediction
  • comparison
  • highlighting
  • significant
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