The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
the pie chart
,
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illustrates population growth in three different
ages category
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from 2000 and it predicts the
populance
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population
in 2050 in Yemen and Italy.
overall
, the chart clarifies that youth and adults allocated the largest proportion of the population to themselves in both countries and years.
while
, children under 14, placed in
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highest percentage in Yemen,
however
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it is in
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third place in Italy. As we can see, the number of young people in Yemen will see a decrease from almost half to just over a third per cent.
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the number of old
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individuals
living in
this
country will not experience a significant change. still, adults, who
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been living in Italy,
is
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going to have a dramatic
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by 15 per cent.
however
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the children still
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last
place to almost one in ten per cent in 2050.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • age distribution
  • population skewed
  • younger age groups
  • significant proportion
  • older population
  • projected
  • demographics
  • societal and economic challenges
  • youthful population
  • growing workforce
  • economic growth
  • aging population
  • demand for healthcare
  • pension systems
  • invest in education
  • job creation
  • demographic dividend
  • social policies
  • sustainable
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