The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
The growth of online shopping brings us a
convinent
life Correct your spelling
convenient
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in that
that
we can access Correct pronoun usage
which
to
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apply
varies
Replace the word
various
commodity
anywhere just using our Fix the agreement mistake
commodities
cellphone
. Some people Correct your spelling
cell phones
thinks
that Change the verb form
think
this
would lead to all shops
in towns
and cities
closing, however
, I disagree with that.
The opinion that online shopping will have negative
effect on Add an article
a negative
shops
in towns
and cities
mainly account
Correct subject-verb agreement
accounts
on
these facts. First of all, merchandise on Change preposition
for
Add an article
the internet
internet
Capitalize word
Internet
are
mainly cheaper than in Change the verb form
is
shops
for their
low cost, so Correct pronoun usage
its
that
more people Correct word choice
apply
preferred
buying goods online than going to Change the form of the verb
prefer
shops
. Secondly
, shopping online is more convinient
than driving to the city centre where parking is always a problem. Correct your spelling
convenient
Thirdly
, there are abundant commodity choices online, and searching is as easy as moving the
finger, Correct article usage
a
while
in department
store or supermarket, we can hardly buy all the stuff at one time. In conclusion, online shopping is winning more and more market share, and Correct article usage
a department
threaten
the Correct subject-verb agreement
threatens
morket
of Correct your spelling
market
shops
in towns
and cities
.
In my opinion, online shopping can coexist with shops
well, and they can benefit from each other. To some extent, online shopping would never replace shops
, especially in particular
fields, for example
, service
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the service
industry
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industries
such
as barber's
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barber
shops
, restaurants
. Correct word choice
and restaurants
In addition
, the lower price
onlineFix the agreement mistake
prices
,
will push the Remove the comma
apply
shops
in towns
to reduce the price
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prices
while
improve
the quality, in order to attract more consumers, which would promote the development of companies. At Change the verb form
improving
last
, some shops
nowadays are not only a place to buy, but also
a social containment for people to get together.
On the whole, I think online shopping will not lead all
Change preposition
to all
shops
in towns
and cities
closing, but on opposite
, online shopping will get along well with Correct article usage
the opposite
shops
and be benefical
to Correct your spelling
beneficial
shopping
market.Correct article usage
the shopping
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