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The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make companies where relevant.

The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make companies where relevant.
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The two bar charts give information about two reasons for studying among students of five age groups and the number of support they received from employers. The reason for career in age under 26
group
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 is the highest, with 80%, the second is aged 26-29, with almost 70%, and the third is aged 30-39, with 55%, the over 49
group
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 is lowest, with under 20%. The reason for the interest trend is upside-down, the highest is aged over 49
groups
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group
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 with 70%, and the lowest is
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the aged
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aged
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age
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 under 26
group
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 with 10%. The interesting part is the aged 40-49
group
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 has the same percentage for both reasons, with 40%. The
group
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received
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that received
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 the most support was aged under 26, with over 60%, second
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was
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 aged 26-29, with 50%, followed by
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those aged
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aged
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ages
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 over 49, with over 40%, the
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received
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that received
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 the lowest help was aged under 30-39, with 30%.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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