The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) in 2015 with the predictions for 2040.

The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) in 2015 with the predictions for 2040.
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pie charts display the
energy
capacity percentages of five different sources in 2015,
along with
projections for their transformation by 2040.
Overall
, it is predicted to double the total availability from all sources. Notably, solar
energy
is expected to see
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increase,
while
the proportion of fossil fuels will decline but will still consist
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a large amount. The most dramatic prediction is fossil fuels might no longer take almost
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, but dwindle to slightly less than
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half of the total.
Furthermore
, solar
energy
is forecasted to multiply
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proportions by nine times, going from 2% to 18%.
Although
not as drastic as solar, but still significant expected
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is wind starting from 5% getting multiplied by around two and a half times, reaching 12%. As for the remaining two sources, the
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of gigawatts
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produce is expected to increase, but within the pie chart they are overpowered by the solar and
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changes. Both of them decline by
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, which means nuclear
energy
will go to 22% and the other renewables to 5%.
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