The diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selectting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

#type #electricity #summarise #information #features #comparisions

The diagram

illustrate

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illustrates

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the information about the process of the production of

electricity

. It

also

depicts that a special kind of coal is used for it.

However

, over

all

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apply

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it tells us

that

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apply

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how coal

are

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extracted from mines and sent to industries in

form

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the form

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electricity

. Moving to the process, coals are first extracted from mines.

Than

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they are crushed and loaded in the

trusks

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trucks

and

send

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sent

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gassifiers

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gasifiers

. After a huge

process

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process,

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the solid water is

seprated

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separated

and gas is

transfered

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transferred

to coolers. Here in

coolers

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coolers,

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it is stored for some days.

Moreover

, it

is later send

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to gas power plants, where after

seprating

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separating

heat waste from the gas, it is converted

in to

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into

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electricity

This

electricity

transfered

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transferred

to houses and industries for use. In conclusion, it is true that countries are experimenting

new

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things to generate light. Light from coal is

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the formost

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formost

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foremost

choice of the nations.

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instance

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India is the one who has generated tons of light from coal.

Therefore

, Pakistan is next in line.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity with synonyms.

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
21Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

170 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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