15.10.2024 Question 30 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Since science and technology are becoming more and more important in modern society, schools should spend more time on teaching these subjects rather than on arts and humanities. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Write at least 250 words

Since science and technological progress

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achieved and

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a

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integral part of the developed world, some people have a perspective that school should provide these subjects with more

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in the syllabus,

instead

of creativity and mortality.

While

we ought to implement these advanced achievements in the curriculum, I suppose that the holistic

development

of

students

can’t be accomplished without arts and

humanities

subjects. To commence with, proliferations in science and

technology

have been great companions in the betterment of society: they have increased our living standards,

such

as through the internet, our communication capabilities have improved, or thanks to machinery, the pressure on

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workforce has been relieved.

In addition

,

technology

provides people from distinctive areas

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access

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worldwide network of valuable knowledge;

thus

,

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job opportunities and success in life, which not only

stimulate

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the

development

of the global economy

,

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but

also

narrow

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the gap between the wealthy and poor countries.

Therefore

, incorporating science and

technology

into the syllabus is indispensable. Because

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they will help

students

acquire a tremendous amount of information about the innovations of the world so they won’t be left behind. Despite the prominence of

technology

in

curriculum

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, the advantages of

arts

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the arts

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and

humanities

field of studies shouldn’t be ignored. Because these fields can offer

students

with better emotional intelligence and cultural awareness. Regarding the former, art is food for

soul

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the soul

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, which can help people get rid of monotonous tasks to dive deeper into their own world.

Furthermore

, through art, individuals can express their thoughts unreservedly, contributing to the

development

of

independent thinking

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of

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students

. In terms of awareness,

humanities

subjects promote ethical reasoning and moral understanding, helping

students

navigate complex societal issues.

Moreover

,

students

can have more valuable knowledge about diverse cultures, histories, and societies,

also

fostering empathy and global issues awareness. In conclusion, the advantages of spending more

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for

technology

in study programs

is

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explicit, but the acquaintance of arts and

humanities

fields is

also

necessary. I believe that schools should strike a balance between these two aspects for

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comprehensive

students

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development

.