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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The map illustrates the description of the
center
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 of a town, known as Islip. It
also
 shows how is it now and its plans
of
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 development for the future,
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 far as
current
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a current
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 map of Islip is concerned, the
country side
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 is located in the north of the town,
where as
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 the road is situated in the
center
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centre
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and it is comprised
by
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the
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shops on both
of
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the
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sides.
However
,
park
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the park
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 is located in
th
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the
 east and
school
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 in the west. Between
park
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 and
school
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, two housing areas can be seen.
Furthermore
, the authorities have given a development plan, which
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 completely transformed the structure of the Islip. The roads will cover the entire area. Some new constructions of
bus
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the bus
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 station, car park, shopping
center
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 and new housing, will be added.
Along with
 it,
shopes
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shoppes
shops
 will be placed in the
center
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.
However
, the location of
old
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 housing will be changed. One housing will be at the back of the shop,
whereas
 the other will be on the other side of the road. In the west Dual carriageway will be built and
at the end
 of it,
school
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the school
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 will be constructed.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words center with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pedestrian-only zone
  • dual carriageway
  • current
  • surrounded by
  • propose
  • infrastructure
  • bus station
  • car park
  • residential housing
  • traffic flow
  • connectivity
  • green spaces
  • recreational areas
  • development plans
  • main features
  • town center
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