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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts below show the changes in the percentage of people taking different courses at a college in Canada. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts below show the changes in the percentage of people taking different courses at a college in Canada. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The pie charts illustrate the total spending divided into five expenditures namely insurance, teacher
salaries
,
furniture
 and
equipment
, resource example books, and other
workers
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workers'
worker's
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salaries
 from 1981, 1991 and 2001.
Overall
, it can be seen that teachers'
salaries
was
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were
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 the highest
expenditure
, and the lowest was insurance. In detail, In 1981 the biggest
expenditure
in
Change preposition
on
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 school was
teachers
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teachers'
teacher's
show examples
salaries
 40%, and it increased in 1991
about
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by about
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 50%, and slowly decreased
about
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by about
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 45%.
Besides
 that, other workers'
salaries
was
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were
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 the second highest in 1981 around 28%, and decreased
around
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to around
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 22%, and still declined in 2001
about
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by about
show examples
 15%.
In contrast
, the lowest school spending in 1981 was insurance around 2%, and slowly increased become 3%, and
increase
Wrong verb form
increased
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 5% became 8%.
Additionally
,
furniture
 and
equipment
, and
resources
 like books had
same
Correct article usage
the same
show examples
 total spending
around
Change preposition
of around
show examples
 15% in 1981, ten years after, the
expenditure
of
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on
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resources
 experienced an increase
about
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of about
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 20% and exceeded the
furniture
 and
equipment
, the percentage of
furniture
 and
equipment
 in 1991 around 5%,
while
 2001 the
expenditure
 of
furniture
 and
equipment
 exceeded the
resources
, the
percentager
Correct your spelling
percentage
percentages
 around 23% and for
resources
 around 9%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salaries, furniture, equipment, expenditure, resources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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