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The pie charts below show the changes in the percentage of people taking different courses at a college in Canada. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the changes in the percentage of people taking different courses at a college in Canada. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the total spending divided into five expenditures namely insurance, teacher
salaries
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,
furniture
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 and
equipment
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, resource example books, and other
workers
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workers'
worker's
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salaries
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 from 1981, 1991 and 2001.
Overall
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, it can be seen that teachers'
salaries
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was
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were
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 the highest
expenditure
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, and the lowest was insurance. In detail, In 1981 the biggest
expenditure
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in
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on
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 school was
teachers
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teachers'
teacher's
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salaries
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 40%, and it increased in 1991
about
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by about
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 50%, and slowly decreased
about
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by about
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 45%.
Besides
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 that, other workers'
salaries
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was
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were
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 the second highest in 1981 around 28%, and decreased
around
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to around
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 22%, and still declined in 2001
about
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by about
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 15%.
In contrast
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, the lowest school spending in 1981 was insurance around 2%, and slowly increased become 3%, and
increase
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increased
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 5% became 8%.
Additionally
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,
furniture
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 and
equipment
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, and
resources
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 like books had
same
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the same
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 total spending
around
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of around
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 15% in 1981, ten years after, the
expenditure
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of
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on
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resources
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 experienced an increase
about
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of about
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 20% and exceeded the
furniture
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 and
equipment
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, the percentage of
furniture
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 and
equipment
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 in 1991 around 5%,
while
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 2001 the
expenditure
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 of
furniture
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 and
equipment
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 exceeded the
resources
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, the
percentager
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percentage
percentages
 around 23% and for
resources
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 around 9%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salaries, furniture, equipment, expenditure, resources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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