The graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two diagrams below indicate the differences in the percentage of 60-

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64-year-old

years

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old men and women go to work in four countries in 2000 and 1970.

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, in all four nations, the number of men in employment

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higher than women. In the men’s graph, workers had to work longer in 2000 than in 1970.

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, the work time of female employees

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fluctuated

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between 1970 and 2000. As can be seen, in the male graph, Japan is the leading country of old employees in both

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, Japan and the USA are two countries which have a noticeable rise in the percentage. After that Australia has a significant change of 30% over 30

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, the number of elderly workers in Belgium has dramatically increased by 60%,

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data is double in Australia.

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, in the women’s graph, the change is minimal over the

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It is clear that

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Japan and the USA have the highest number of old women employees about 36-43%.

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, the lowest percentage in

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diagram is Belgium and Australia, the information in the two countries is not over 20%.

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