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The bar chart illustrates, the proportion of people watching movies in theatres for the year 2012. Moreover,the populace is eminent between male and female while categorizing them into five diffrent age groups. Overall, it is evident that the number of cinema-goers fluctuated across different age groups, however, senior citizens made up the majority of the audience. On the one hand, individuals belonging to the age group 14-17 years and

The bar chart illustrates, the proportion of people watching movies in theatres for the year 2012. Moreover,the populace is eminent between male and female while categorizing them into five diffrent age groups. Overall, it is evident that the number of cinema-goers fluctuated across different age groups, however, senior citizens made up the majority of the audience. On the one hand, individuals belonging to the age group 14-17 years and
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The bar chart illustrates, the proportion of people watching movies in theatres for the year 2012.
Moreover
,the populace is eminent between male and female
while
 categorizing them into five
diffrent
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different
age
 groups.
Overall
, it is evident that the number of cinema-goers fluctuated across different
age
 groups,
however
, senior citizens made up the majority of the audience. On the one hand, individuals belonging to the
age
 group 14-17
years
 and 35-49
years
 showcased
same
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the same
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 percentage on a bar chart.
On the other hand
, the number of male citizenships between 18-24
years
 of
age
 was slightly
diffrent
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different
that
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than
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 other counterparts. At the same time, the population between 25-34
years
 put on view
same
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the same
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 statistics with 23% men and 20% women.
In contrast
, 33% of women over the
age
 of 50 showed a greater interest in cinemas,
while
 only 29% of men in the same
age
 group expressed interest in going to the theatre.
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