The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates the

contribution

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of three sectors:

agriculture

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, industry, and

services

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to India’s GDP from 1960 to 1990.

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, in the

last

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three

decades

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India’s

GDP

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GDP's

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main

contribution

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was from

agriculture

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whereas

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in the

last

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ten

years

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the main

contribution

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was

services

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Agriculture

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went down over the period given ,

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industry and

services

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increased over

fourty

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forty

years. The percentage of

agriculture

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was already at its peak

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the beginning of the period at about 61%.

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figure

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began to drop slightly during the period given until it reached its lowest at approximately 12% in 2000 .

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services

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just started at almost 14% in 1960, after which the proportion started rising gradually for four decades until it reached its highest point at over 60% in the final year and it was the highest sector

contribution

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among them in 2000. In terms of industry, it accounted for 13% in 1960 ,

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it went up to approximately 23%

1980

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in 1980

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and it

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remained the same in 1980 before falling dramatically to nearly 12% in 2000.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Task Achievement: 9.0

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179 words

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The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The impact that growing demand for more flights has had on the environment is a major concern for many countries. Some people believe that one way to limit the number of people traveling by air is to increase taxes on flights. To what extent do you think this could solve the problem?

Inmany countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?

Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.