The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the
contribution
of three sectors:
agriculture
, industry, and
services
to India’s GDP from 1960 to 1990.
Overall
, in the
last
three
decades
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India’s
GDP
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GDP's
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main
contribution
was from
agriculture
,
whereas
in the
last
ten
years
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the main
contribution
was
services
.
Agriculture
went down over the period given ,
while
industry and
services
increased over
fourty
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forty
years. The percentage of
agriculture
was already at its peak
in
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at
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the beginning of the period at about 61%.
This
figure
then
began to drop slightly during the period given until it reached its lowest at approximately 12% in 2000 .
On the other hand
,
services
just started at almost 14% in 1960, after which the proportion started rising gradually for four decades until it reached its highest point at over 60% in the final year and it was the highest sector
contribution
among them in 2000. In terms of industry, it accounted for 13% in 1960 ,
then
it went up to approximately 23%
1980
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in 1980
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and it
also
remained the same in 1980 before falling dramatically to nearly 12% in 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words contribution, agriculture, services with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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