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The diagrams below give information about the Azadi Tower in Tehran and an outline project to extend it underground. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown

The diagrams below give information about the Azadi Tower in Tehran and an outline project to extend it underground. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown
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This
 session contains two
digrams
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diagrams
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, one is about
Eiffel
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the Eiffel
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Tower
, surrounded by different historical buildings,
whereas
 the other illustrates the outline project for
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the extention
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extention
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extension
 of
underground
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the underground
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 of
Eiffel
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the Eiffel
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tower
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Tower
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. The Eiffel
tower
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Tower
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 is near to Ecole Militaire and at the brink of
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the seine
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seine
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Seine
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. It is about 324 m high. The weight of its metal structure is about 10,100 tonnes.
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,
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the first platform is 57m,
second
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 one is 115m. and the viewing platforms, have 1665 steps. As far as the project for underground
in
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is
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 concerned, the first level with the glass ceiling and a lift, is for
ticket
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a ticket
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 office and access to
tower
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the tower
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. The second level is for shops and restaurants. The third is for
cinema
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the cinema
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 and museum.
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, both
fourth
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the fourth
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 and fifth levels are for parking.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tower with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • architectural landmark
  • commemorate
  • iconic structure
  • reinforced concrete
  • geometric patterns
  • cultural heritage
  • subterranean
  • urban development
  • excavation
  • infrastructure
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • feasibility study
  • economic impact
  • cultural significance
  • public engagement
  • engineering challenges
  • construction phase
  • project outline
  • urban planning
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