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The line graph below show the number of car produced in three different countries from 2003 to 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where releveant.

The line graph below show the number of car produced in three different countries from 2003 to 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where releveant.
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The given line chart illustrates
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 about significant variations
vehicle
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production
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nation
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 over the period of seven years, between 2003 and 2009
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, Australia and Thailand tended to increase in
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production
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production
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 figures made in Argentina showed
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 downward trend . Commencing with the year 2003, Argentina was the highest nation in
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 manufactured, at about 400.
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 was followed by Australia ,at 300. Motor vehicles produced in Thailand account for only a part of the value, at 161 In the following years, by 2005,
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 in Thailand had increased rapidly from 161 to 600 before reaching 999 in 2009.At
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that time, Argentina has shown the opposite as vehicle manufactured figures have fallen rapidly to just 100. From 2005 to 2009,after rose slightly to 400 , the data for Australia skyrocketed to a peak of 1119 cars, making it the country with the highest number of vehicles produced.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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