The given pie charts illustrate the information on comparison of exported goods of 5 categories in Great Britain over 5 years between 2010 and 2015.

The given pie charts illustrate the information on comparison of exported goods of 5 categories in Great Britain over 5 years between 2010 and 2015.
The data compares Great Britain's exported items in 2010 and 2015.
Overall
, it can
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seen clearly that machinery
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demonstrated
the highest percentage,
while
organic chemicals showed the lowest number of exports,
comparing
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to the other
stuffs
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, in both years. Both in 2010 and 2015, there were three items that led the highest percentage in comparison with others,
such
as machinery, vehicles, and
pharmaceticals
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pharmaceuticals
. In 2010,
mechinery
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machinery
led the highest rate, at 29% and
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%, at 30%, in 2015.
This
number was followed by the export of vehicles, which
also
showed
the
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growth, from 28% in 2010 to 29% in 2015.
In contrast
, 9% of exporting
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pharmaceutical
pharmaceuticals
decreased,
frrom
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from
27% to 18%. Meanwhile, the other three exporting stuffs showed
the
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low percentages, at under 15% in both years, but showed
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rise. Plastics which was exported only 9% in 2010, increased 4% to 13% in 2019.
This
growth
trends
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also
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followed by organic chemicals, with
3
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a 3
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% rise, from 7% to 10%.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exported goods
  • export percentage
  • categories
  • comparison
  • noticeable changes
  • overall trend
  • emerging sectors
  • declining industries
  • economic factors
  • consumer demand
  • government policies
  • patterns
  • relationships
  • segments
  • describe
  • identify
  • significant changes
  • notable shifts
  • stable
  • positions
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