The given pie charts illustrate the information on comparison of exported goods of 5 categories in Great Britain over 5 years between 2010 and 2015.

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The data compares Great Britain's exported items in 2010 and 2015.

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, it can

bee

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seen clearly that machinery

demontrated

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demonstrated

the highest percentage,

while

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organic chemicals showed the lowest number of exports,

comparing

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to the other

stuffs

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, in both years. Both in 2010 and 2015, there were three items that led the highest percentage in comparison with others,

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as machinery, vehicles, and

pharmaceticals

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pharmaceuticals

. In 2010,

mechinery

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machinery

led the highest rate, at 29% and

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%, at 30%, in 2015.

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number was followed by the export of vehicles, which

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showed

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growth, from 28% in 2010 to 29% in 2015.

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, 9% of exporting

pharmacetical

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pharmaceutical

pharmaceuticals

decreased,

frrom

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from

27% to 18%. Meanwhile, the other three exporting stuffs showed

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low percentages, at under 15% in both years, but showed

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rise. Plastics which was exported only 9% in 2010, increased 4% to 13% in 2019.

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growth

trends

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also

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followed by organic chemicals, with

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a 3

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% rise, from 7% to 10%.

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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

162 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

exported goods
export percentage
categories
comparison
noticeable changes
overall trend
emerging sectors
declining industries
economic factors
consumer demand
government policies
patterns
relationships
segments
describe
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significant changes
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