Some people argue that it is more important to have an enjoyable job than to earn a lot of money. Others disagree and think that a good salary leads to a better life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
There
some
who Add a missing verb
are some
believed
that having an enjoyable Wrong verb form
believe
job
is much essential
than earning a sum of Correct quantifier usage
more essential
money
. While other
people contradict Correct word choice
Other
to
the idea and think that having a better Change preposition
apply
salary
would lead to a greater
Correct word choice
better
life
. In this
essay, I will discuss with
the said two views and point of view about it.
Having Change preposition
apply
an
enjoyable Correct article usage
apply
work
than
Rephrase
rather than
to earn
a much of Change the verb form
earning
money
depends on the perceptions of a person
. For example
, one prefers to earn a sum of money
that
to enjoy the Correct word choice
than
job
while
earning. While there
are Correct word choice
There
also
some who would prefer to enjoy the job
while
earning enough or more than enough money
.
On the other hand
, there are also
number
of people who Change the article
a number
the number
believed
that having a good Wrong verb form
believe
salary
would lead to a brighter life
in the future. For example
, giving all hard works
and Fix the agreement mistake
work
efforts
Fix the agreement mistake
effort
while
performing the job
and obtaining a better salary
at the same time would eventually lead a person
to acquire his or her needs and wants. That being said, money
is part of life
and the basic source to buy one's basic needs and at some point, the
wants.
In my point of view, practicality comes Correct article usage
apply
first,
since the demand and supplies varies
and the cost of living today is not that easy to deal with. So, having a Change the verb form
vary
work
with a better salary
and benefits can motivate a person
to do better and improve each day at work
while
enjoying the job
at the same time. Thus
, when enough and more money
to acquire, the more a person
can satisfy the self especially
in terms of basic needs and followed by wants. Add the comma(s)
, especially
In addition
, one can experience the life
that he or she envisioned because of enjoying things while
earning money
.
To sum up
, the views varies
to each Change the verb form
vary
individuals
when it comes to Change to a singular noun
individual
salary
and having a fruitful life
. Some would ideally choose an enjoyable work
yet fulfilling compensation that can sustain daily living thus
having a life
that they envisioned of
.Change preposition
apply
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coherence
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task response
Make sure to provide clear examples to strengthen your arguments. Use specific situations or statistics when possible.
coherence
Enhance your conclusion by summarizing the key points discussed in the essay, to reinforce your stance clearly.
task response
You have successfully introduced both perspectives and provided your own opinion, which shows a well-rounded approach to the topic.
coherence
The introduction clearly outlines the main argument and sets the stage for the discussion.