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You received a letter from your friend informing you that his elderly parents are coming to visit in you area and he is asking for your advice. write a letter to your friend.In you letter write which places they should visit where they should live Invite them to do something with you

#friend #parents #visit #area #advice #places
Dear Ram, It was
reallly
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really
 nice to hear that your
parents
 are coming to visit my area in
this
 season of autumn when one can freely
room
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roam
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 around without worry about
carring
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carrying
caring
 heavy jackets or
scorching
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the scorching
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 heat
by
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of
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sun
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the sun
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 and at the same
time
i
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I
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 have
a
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 off from my work for a week which
i
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I
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 can productively use by showing your
parents
 around and will be able to spend some quality
time
. Fortunately, you have informed me ahead of
time
 and
i
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I
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 am prepared to show them each and every popular corner of my area which are must visit
placesf
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places
 of my city.I am sure you have heard of these places somewhere in life
such
 as Golden
temple
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Temple
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,
jaliyawala bagh
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Jaliyawala Bagh
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,
bagha border
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Bagha Border
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,Haveli and many more .But, you have to
arranage
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arrange
 a place for them where they can live during
this
 vacation because
i
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I
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 am unable to offer
a places
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places
a place
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 as
i
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I
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 am already having some guests visiting me,but,
i
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I
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 can offer you
best
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the best
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 hotels
of
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in
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 my city
with
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at
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 a reasonable price and
best
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the best
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 service. I am really thrilled to tell you that my
parents
 are throwing their retirement party
in
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apply
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that week and
i
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I
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 am really excited to invite your
parents
for
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to
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 the celebration as it is
good
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a good
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time
 to introduce them
with
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to
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 each other,so that we can take one step ahead in our relationship. Hoping to see
you
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your
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parents
 soon. Your lovingly Karmjeet
kaur
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coherence cohesion
Improve paragraph structure to present one idea per paragraph clearly.
task achievement
Make sure to carefully review and correct minor grammar and spelling errors.
task achievement
The letter provides detailed information on tourist spots and accommodations.
task achievement
It includes a personal invitation, which adds a warm and welcoming touch.
coherence cohesion
Logical flow with a friendly and informative tone throughout the letter.
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