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In many cities, there is little control on the design and construction of new houses. Some people think that people can choose to build houses in their own styles instead of building them with the same style as the old house style in local areas. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays,many cities allow
people
 to choose the
design
 of their own
buildings
 without strong limitations .
This
 could benefit
people
 by letting them reflect their ideas freely and these
buildings
 may attract
tourist
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tourists
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 and refresh the economy.
However
,
peoplmay
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people may
people
 choose
putting
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to put
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unapproperate
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inappropriate
design
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designs
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 that could
effect
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affect
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 other
people
 in
negative
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a negative
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 way. One of the main advantages is
this phenomena
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this phenomenon
these phenomena
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 could increase
dieversity
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diversity
 and make
buildinges
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buildings
building
 beautiful and unique. when
indivisuals
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individuals
 can make their own
choises
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choices
 regarding the style of their homes or offices they can reflect their personalities and their ideas without the fear of
consiquences
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consequences
.
For example
, many
people
 when they start their own
bussinesses
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businesses
,
they
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apply
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want to make that the
design
 is special and
reflect
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reflects
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 the purpose of the project (like
cafe
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a cafe
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) to attract more
costumers
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customers
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.
furthermore
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 these
type
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types
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 of special
buildinges
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buildings
building
 can benefit not only the owners but
also
 whole community .
For example
, in many cities there are
buisseness
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businesses
 places have become
torest
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the most
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 attraction places.
Therefore
 the
uniquness
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uniqueness
 of these places can
offers
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 financial growth to the country.
On the other hand
 ,if these
buildinges
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buildings
 do not undergo
to
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policies from the government they might
effect
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affect
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 others negatively .
For instance
 ,high
buildinges
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buildings
 can prevent sunlight from reaching other lower ones if there are no rules to control the length of them. Another possible drawback is that some
people
 choose
awkward
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design
 that could
effects
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affect
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 the view of the city. If
people
 choose
putting
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to put
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inapproperate
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inappropriate
 images or statues in front of their
offecis
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offices
, that could
makes
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make
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 the community feel unrespectful. Nowadays,many cities do not have enough control
on
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over
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 the
design
 of
buildings
 .
This
 could benefit
people
 by
allow
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allowing
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 them
reflect
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to reflect
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 their ideas
also
 these
buildings
 may bring financial growth if they become tourist attractions . But some
people
 could put
unapproperate
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inappropriate
design
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designs
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 that could
effect
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affect
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 other
people
 in
negative
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a negative
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 way.
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coherence
Consider improving the logical flow by organizing ideas more clearly. Each paragraph should start with a clear topic sentence and be followed by supporting details that are directly linked to the main idea.
coherence
Make sure to include a clear and concise introduction and conclusion, reiterating your main points and giving a balanced view.
task response
Make sure each main point is elaborated fully with clear examples and explanations. This will strengthen your argument and provide a more complete task response.
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Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to ensure clarity. Use a variety of sentence structures to avoid repetition and ensure clarity.
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Your essay makes a good attempt to discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of allowing individuals to choose their own building designs, providing a balanced view.
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You have managed to incorporate specific examples, which help to illustrate your points.
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The essay covers a relevant topic and demonstrates a reasonable understanding of the potential impacts of individualized building designs.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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