Task 1 bar graph shows the number of boys and girls playing sports in english town in 2012

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The graph illustrates the number of children both males and

females

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who participated in physical activities in a town in England in the year 2012. It's notable that boys played sports more than

girls

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in general and dominated most sports events except Badminton and swimming which

girls

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preferred.

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, hockey was the least played

sport

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among both genders. The most popular sports among males were football and Tennis as 60 and 50 boys participated in them, respectively.

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swimming, cycling and Badminton were followed by 40,38 and 30 boys. The least practiced

sport

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was Hokey as only 12 males were involved in it.

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, the most common

sport

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among

females

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was swimming as around 50

girls

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participated in it. Badminton and Tennis came second with 40 and 38

females

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playing, followed by cycling and Football with same number of participants of 20

females

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. Similar to the male group, Hockey came

last

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with only 9

girls

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playing

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sport

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words females, girls, sport with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

161 words

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Task 1 bar graph shows the number of boys and girls playing sports in english town in 2012

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter - introduce yourself - explain what is wrong with the furniture - say what action you would like the landlord to take.

A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not well-managed. What are the advantages and disadvantaged of tourism in the modern world?

Ambition is a positive quality for people to have in society today. How important is it for people who want to succeed in life? Is it a positive or negative characteristic?

Many people think that painting and music do not directly improve the quality of people. Therefore, government should not spend too much money on artistic projects. Do you agree or disagree?