The chart below shows numbers of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows numbers of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustration describes the population of adults who joined the major sports
event
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events
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on
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in
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the years 1997 and 2017. In conclusion, Tennis is the
all time
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all-time
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favourite sport of the legal-aged citizens for
both
years; 1997 and 2017. The highest
number
of
adult
participants
came
during
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in
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1997, which came from
Tennis
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a Tennis
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event with 50,000 individuals.
Additionally
, there was an
increased
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in
number
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a number
the number
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of people who
play
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played
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Tennis
on
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2017 with
estimated
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an estimated
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55,000.
Succeddingly
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Succeeding
, it was followed by Football and Rugby with an estimate of roughly less than 50,000
participants
on
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2017.
However
, compared
on
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to
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the previous two
decade
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decades
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on
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1997
both
sports events only got 30,000
participants
which is fewer in comparison to 2017.
Then
it was followed by Swimming and Golf
who
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which
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have
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had
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more than 30,000
participants
for
both
time
period
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periods
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between 1997 and 2017.
However
, Swimming got
constant
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a constant
the constant
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number
of
joinees
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joints
joiners
on
both
timeline
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timelines
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from 1997 and 2017. The least popular event
on
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in
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adult
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the adult
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age group
on
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in
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year
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the year
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1997 was Basketball with only less than 10,000 players.
However
,
the
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apply
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adult
Basketball players increased in
number
on
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in
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2017
with
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apply
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two times from
its
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apply
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previous population
on
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in
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1997 with more than 20,000
on
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apply
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data.
Likewise
, Cricket was
least
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the least
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popular
on
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in
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year
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the year
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2017 with less than 10,000
participans
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participants
.
However
, it was previously known to
adult
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adults
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on
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in
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year
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the year
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1997 with more than 25,000
participants
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words both, number, adult, participants with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rates
  • adult demographic
  • comparison
  • percent change
  • significant increase/decrease
  • trend analysis
  • sports popularity
  • ranking changes
  • general patterns
  • social factors
  • 20-year period
  • time span
  • major sports
  • data interpretation
  • highlight features
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