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Band 3.5

The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

This
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 gross domestic bar chart demonstrates a growing pattern in
IT
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the IT
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 and service
industry
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 of the UK from 1992 to 2000. The GDP percentage of
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the IT
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industry
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has
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did
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 not much difference between 1992 and 1996,
about
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with about
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 2% growth. From 1996 to 2000,
however
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, the proportion of
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the IT
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industry
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 was booming, increasing from 8% to 12% in 1996 and 15% in 2000.
On the other hand
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, the
developmemt
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development
 of
service
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the service
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industry
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 was steady over these 8 years. The most essential GDP growth
occured
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occurred
 from 1992 to 1994,
rasied
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rising
 from 4% to around 6%. After that, a slight growing pattern was witnessed, with only
approximiately
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approximately
1
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a 1
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% increase in each of the following years. In conclusion, the service
industry
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was
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took up about 8% which was 7% lower than
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the IT
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industry
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 in 2002. It means
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the IT
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industry
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 has
better
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a better
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 GPD margin in
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the UK
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words industry with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • components
  • GDP
  • consumption
  • investment
  • government spending
  • net exports
  • display
  • categories
  • largest
  • increase
  • stable
  • range
  • decline
  • fluctuate
  • gradual
  • positive values
  • negative values
  • overall
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