The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The two pie
chart
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charts
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illustrate information regarding total world
electricity
production
and energy
using
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last
year.
According to
the energy consumption in the world, oil showed to be the highest with 34.3%.
In addition
, coal seemed to be the second in order with approximately 25%.
Morover
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Moreover
, Gas
consumed
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was consumed
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slightly under 21%
last
year. Combustible Renewable and waste , nuclear, hydro and
others
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other
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sources of consumption demonstrated the rest of
totoal
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total
energy with
percentage
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a percentage
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19
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of 19
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% respectively. In regard to total
electricity
generation in the world, Coal had the highest proportion with almost 40%
while
oil had a weak contribution
in
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electricity
production
with only 6.7%.
Additionally
, Gas and Hydro had a great
influince
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influence
with 19,6% and 16.1% . Nuclear had a total
production
with
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15.7% in
compare
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with other sources of generation with only 2.1%.
Overall
, Oil had a huge consumption effect
while
it had a small amount of
electricity
production
.
On the other hand
, Coal
generate
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around 40%
electricity
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of electricity
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while
it
consumed
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consumes
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around 25%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, production with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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