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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart gives information about American individuals' fast food consumption
frequency
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 in three periods (2003, 2006, and 2013).
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the proportion of
people
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 who ate fast food in restaurants every day, several
times
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 a week, once a week, and never frequently declined over the 10 years,
while
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 we can see a rise in the percentage of
people
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 who consume in for once or twice a month and a few
times
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 a year. First of all, one of the key changes is, in 2003 the proportion of
people
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 who ate non-homemade foods in restaurants once or twice a month was just under 30%, and after some fluctuations, it grew by roughly 5%.
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,
this
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 pattern was seen in a few
times
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 a year
frequency
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.
On the other hand
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, there was a sharp decrease in once-a-week
frequency
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 food consumption which started at just over 30% at the beginning of the period and ended at roughly 25%.
Moreover
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, the percentage of
people
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 who ate out every day, several
times
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 a week, and never
frequency
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 declined by an average of 5%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words frequency, people, times with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fast food consumption
  • dining frequency
  • decade overview
  • trend analysis
  • to dine out
  • fluctuation
  • sharp increase
  • gradual decline
  • eating habits
  • statistical comparison
  • consuming pattern
  • noteworthy change
  • anomaly
  • periodic comparison
  • data interpretation
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