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(Bar Chart) The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day

(Bar Chart) The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day
The bar charts show information about the number of
men
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 and
women
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 participating in four house chores and the average amount of
time
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 spent by each gender in doing the chores daily.
Overall
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, most
men
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 and
women
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 do cooking and it is the housework with the most
time
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 spent by both genders. The percentage of
women
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 and
men
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 who cook
are
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is
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 the highest among all categories with 85% and 60% respectively.
Similarly
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,
women
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 account for more than
men
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 in cleaning with just above 60%
whereas
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 only 40% of
men
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participating
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participate
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 in cleaning.
By contrast
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, house repairs allocate more
number
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numbers
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 than
women
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 which are 19% and 8% consecutively. Meanwhile, there number is similar in pet care which
are
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is
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 around 20% for both
men
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 and
women
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.
Women
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 allocate more
time
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in doing
Verb problem
to
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 cooking and cleaning with more than 65
minutes
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in
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for
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 each task
while
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men
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 spend less than 60
minutes
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.
However
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, spend the least
time
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 doing repairs with just 5
minutes
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 daily meanwhile
men
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 spend more than a quarter. Both
men
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 and
women
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 spend 20
minutes
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 to take care of pets.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, time, minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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