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Task 1: (Bar Chart) The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day

Task 1: (Bar Chart) The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day
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The bar charts show information about the number of
men
 and
women
 participating in four house chores and the average amount of
time
 spent by each gender in doing the chores daily.
Overall
, most
men
 and
women
 do cooking and it is the housework with the most
time
 spent by both genders. The percentage of
women
 and
men
 who cook
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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 the highest among all categories with 85% and 60% respectively.
Similarly
,
women
 account for more than
men
 in cleaning with just above 60%
whereas
 only 40% of
men
participating
Wrong verb form
participate
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 in cleaning.
By contrast
, house repairs allocate more
number
Fix the agreement mistake
numbers
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 than
women
 which are 19% and 8% consecutively. Meanwhile, there number is similar in pet care which
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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 around 20% for both
men
 and
women
.
Women
 allocate more
time
in doing
Verb problem
to
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 cooking and cleaning with more than 65
minutes
in
Change preposition
for
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 each task
while
men
 spend less than 60
minutes
.
However
, spend the least
time
 doing repairs with just 5
minutes
 daily meanwhile
men
 spend more than a quarter. Both
men
 and
women
 spend 20
minutes
 to take care of pets.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, time, minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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