The graph below shows the percentage of the Australian workforce in five industries between 1962 and 2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart shows the Australian percentage between 5 industries between 1962 to 2012,

it is clear that

construction dominated whole industries and gradually increased to reach the peak point in 2020. Between 1962 to 1980 there was stability in manufacturing approximately at 10 and mining at 0

while

gradually decreasing in Agriculture from 11 to 9, and quiet fluctuation in manufacturing from 25 to 20 main with a sharp increase in construction.

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