Small businesses are disappearing and being replaced by large multinational companies. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadantages?

These days, the number of local business names is decreasing day by day. These businesses are closing because they can not compete for prizes or they are bought by other big global
companiescompanies
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companies companies
.
Although
these changes could have some positive effects, In my opinion, their negative effects are much greater than that. There
is
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some advantages of increasing the number of multinational
companies
while
the small ones disappear.
One
of them is people can reach the products lower prizes via the big
companies
.These multinational
companies
can get the raw materials much cheaper than the others because they have lots of stores or shops and their orders will cost lower
due to
the mass production quantity.
For instance
when a small
coffee
shop in Turkey orders
coffee
beans from Guatemala. It has to pay 100-120 $ for each kilogram and sell
one
cup of
coffee
for 5 $ but when a global company wants to order
coffee
beans it can probably get the
one
kilogram for 60-80 $ so
this
one
can sell the
one
cup of
coffee
for 3 $.
On the other hand
,
Although
the lower prices are beneficial for the customers.
This
issue has some negative effects on
countries
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countries'
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economies and inflation. When the local businesses close down or buy the global ones, the global company will make the money
instead
of the local
one
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. And
this
means the current account deficit will increase which is bad for countries. In conclusion, I think the replacement of local businesses
into
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multinational
companies
has lots of disadvantages , especially for governments, but there are some advantages that should not be ignored.
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