The pie charts below describe the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts depict a comparison of online sales for retail sections in New Zealand. They are measured by percentages between 2003 and 2013.

Over all

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, as it can be clearly seen that travel was the greatest rise in New Zealand for both years.

By contrast

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, clothes were the lowest in 2013 and

books

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were the bottom in 2003.

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the given data in the following pie charts,

the

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online shopping for travel was 36% in 2003. It was higher than 2013 by 7%.

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, the consumption of

books

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was 33% in 2013. To illustrate, 2013 was approximately double 2003 in

books

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. It was 33% to 21%.

On the other hand

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, both 2003 and 2013 were nearly similar in clothes and films.

However

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, 2003 was 24% in clothes. It was greater than 2013 by 7%.

While

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the online sales for

books

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in 2003

was

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were

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lesser than

2013

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in 2013

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by only 3%

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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.

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Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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151 words

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The pie charts below describe the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Some people believe that exams are an inappropriate way of measuring students’ performance and should be replaced by continuous assessment. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

Some people believe that women should be treated as equal to men when applying for a job with the police or the military. Others think women are less suitable for this kind of job. Discuss both views and give your opinion.