The pie charts below describe the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below describe  the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New

Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts depict a comparison of online sales for retail sections in New Zealand. They are measured by percentages between 2003 and 2013.
Over all
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, as it can be clearly seen that travel was the greatest rise in New Zealand for both years.
By contrast
, clothes were the lowest in 2013 and
books
were the bottom in 2003.
According to
the given data in the following pie charts,
the
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online shopping for travel was 36% in 2003. It was higher than 2013 by 7%.
Whereas
, the consumption of
books
was 33% in 2013. To illustrate, 2013 was approximately double 2003 in
books
. It was 33% to 21%.
On the other hand
, both 2003 and 2013 were nearly similar in clothes and films.
However
, 2003 was 24% in clothes. It was greater than 2013 by 7%.
While
the online sales for
books
in 2003
was
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lesser than
2013
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in 2013
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by only 3%
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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