The governments encourage large companies to move out of big cities. Advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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modern
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era,
companies
have many diseases
beside of
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their profit for
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. Some
goverments
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governments
government
would suggest that
companies
specially the
indusrial
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industrial
ones
ane
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the ones which
related
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to
business
should move out from
lurge
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rural
cities
to regional eras. There are many benefits and
shortcomes
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shortcomings
for
this
issue that I will expand
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next
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paragraphes
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. One point which could be the most disadvantage of large
companies
which are in large
cities
is air
pollutions
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, which
have
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concerned governments, and they enthusiasm
company
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companies
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to move out of
cities
by making some beneficial
condisions
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conditions
for
companies
,
for instance
, the
companies
will never need to pay
taxs
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taxes
tax
,
on the other hand
, the level of air pollution will come to the
safeer
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safer
safe
levels since the carbon emissions which pollute the air will
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and there will no traffic congestions
beacause
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because
of the employees who travel to work by their cars which work for industrial and
business
companies
However
, moving
business
companies
to outside the large
citises
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cities
would be a bad
dessision
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decision
for the financial problems.Some
governmetns
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governments
do not take
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about
this
arguments
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and sometimes take the prohibitionist approach for these
companies
.
For example
, when a large company which
manage
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the
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business
related to clothes or
foods
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food
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moving
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out
the
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large
cities
, citizens will have to
travell
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travel
to outside to city and it will
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the worst result by complaining people
which
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they
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commute from minutes to hours for
perchasing
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purchasing
their requirements,
thus
, if the
governents
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governments
are
consistant
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consistent
in
porsuading
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persuading
companies
to move out the
cities
, they
most
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look at the solution and problems which will
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in near future.
As
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a
conclution
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conclusion
,
however
, moving out the
companies
to
original
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eras could be
best
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way to clarify problems,but, it can
be
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result
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many
disadvatages
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disadvantages
,
by
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the governments.
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, taking a prohibitionist approach
for
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the problem which
come
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comes
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from
indusrial
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industrial
companies
by encouraging them to
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outside
ouside
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outside
the city will help be likely in
near
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future
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