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Some people say that to become a good teacher, you should acquire enough training, while others say that teaching capibilities can be developed with experience. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people argue that one can be a good teacher
with
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 obtaining sufficient tuition,
while
 others believe that teaching skills can be improved with more time on the job.
This
 essay will compare both these points of view and argue in favour of the latter. If we look at it one way, to become a professional pedagogue, a person needs to study psychology well in order to be careful in dealing with students.
Besides
 that, it is important to acquire knowledge about the right methods to explain any subject to
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.
Otherwise
, the listener may memorize the topic without comprehending it in detail. If we look at it another way, pedagogical ability is formed not only by the received training
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 but
also
 by its application. Lack of experience may compel candidates
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 too much about what they should do in certain situations.
For example
, to avoid noise in the classroom, it is necessary to touch on a theme that will attract everyone's attention,
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 takes more time to
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 familiar with the points of interest of individuals. In my opinion, all tutoring lessons today are based on the results of somebodies' past practices.
In other words
, people perform and come to conclusions,
then
 they choose the best among all outcomes to set precedents for who follows.
Therefore
, the main importance in
this
 matter is experience. In conclusion,
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teaching proficiency can be enhanced through some kinds of education,
however
, I believe experience is the predominant factor in the formation of it.
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task achievement
Expand on your main points with more specific examples from your own experience or observations.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea and that transitions between ideas are smooth and natural.
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You provided a balanced discussion of both views, following the standard prompt structure.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, helping to frame your discussion effectively.
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You effectively explained why experience might be more valuable than just formal training in developing teaching skills.

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