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The line graph shows the past and projected finances for a local authority in New Zealand. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the past and projected finances for a local authority in New Zealand. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 figure depicts finances for an authority centre in New Zealand. It can be seen in
this
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 chart that the rates avenue and the user charges had the highest dedicated budget both in 2012 and 2022. The grants and subsidies had the lowest amount.
However
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, they had an increase in 2015 up to roughly 700
million
Use synonyms
dollar
Change to a plural noun
dollars
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. Meanwhile, the borrowings had some fluctuations over these years, but
it
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they
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 ended in 2022 at the same cost as in 2012. It plateaued from 2017 to 2019 and peaked at approximately 1500
million
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 in 2020. The rates revenue and user charges had an upward trend and increased smoothly without any decline.
Therefore
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, they had roughly 2500 and 2000
million
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of
Change preposition
in
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budgets
Fix the agreement mistake
budget
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 at the peak point. In general, the total order did not change after these financial changes. Two significant declines
had
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apply
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occurred for the borrowings in 2014 and 2020 by 500
million
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 and 600
million
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, respectively.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • projected
  • fluctuation
  • steadily
  • significant
  • revenue
  • expenditure
  • surpass
  • align
  • trend
  • stability
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • trough
  • forecast
  • decline
  • rise
  • consistent
  • notable
  • growth
  • factors
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