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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transport in the Uk between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and makecomparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transport in the Uk between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and makecomparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the quantities of goods
transports
Wrong verb form
transported
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 by four different modes of transport (
road
, water, rail and pipeline ) in
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
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 between 1974 and 2002.
Overall
, looking at the information we can see the
road
 was the most transports used , and the water
cames
Correct your spelling
came
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 the second after him, the line had fluctuated between 1974 and 2002.
to begin
 with, in 1974 the quantities of goods
in
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on
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road
Add an article
the road
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had
Verb problem
were
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 above 64
million
 tonnes and the number increased to 90
million
 in 2002,
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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make
Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
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 the
road
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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the most transport used,
while
in contrast
 the rail witnessed
Correct article usage
a decreased
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decreased
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decrease
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 until 2002 the number reached to 41
million
.
However
, the rate of
used
Wrong verb form
use
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 the water as a transport rose in 1982 and the number
remain
Wrong verb form
remained
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 steady until 2002 had a slight
rose
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rise
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 to 63
million
. pipeline did not record that
much
Correct quantifier usage
many
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 changes, as the line in 1974 was
in
Change preposition
apply
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10
million
 and
then
 slightly increased in 2002 to over 20
million
. In conclusion, the quantities of goods throughout the years
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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depends
Correct subject-verb agreement
depend
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 on the
road
 more than the other
transports
Fix the agreement mistake
transport
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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