Methods of transporation for people travelling to one university for work or study in 2004 and 2009 in the UK. The two pie charts compare five categories of UK travelling percentage of university (train, bicycle, bus, walking, car,) from 2004 to 2009) Units are measured in proportion. al

Methods of transporation for people travelling to one university for work or study in 2004 and 2009 in the UK.

 The two pie charts compare five categories of UK travelling percentage of university (train, bicycle, bus, walking, car,) from 2004 to 2009) Units are measured in proportion. al
The pie charts compare five classifications of university transportation
such
as cycling,
traveling
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by car, bus, train, and walking for the English in the years 2004 and 2009
Overall
, at the beginning of the period, travelling by car made up the biggest part of the chart,
while
rail transport was the least significant part of the methods of transportation.
However
,
at the end
of the period, proportions did not change significantly, they were in a stability. The driving class of transportation was 51% in 2004 and experienced almost a quarter, which decreased to 28% in 2009.
Traveling
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by bus accounted for 33% and had a growth of 13% in 2009.
In addition
,
at
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the beginning, cycling made up 9% of the
traveling
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percentage after that
this
rose to 16% The categories
such
as
traveling
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by train and walking were the smallest segments.
However
, walking and rail transport were 4-3% in 2004 and both rose approximately 1-2% after 5year period.
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