Methods of transporation for people travelling to one university for work or study in 2004 and 2009 in the UK. The two pie charts compare five categories of UK travelling percentage of university (train, bicycle, bus, walking, car,) from 2004 to 2009) Units are measured in proportion. al

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The pie charts compare five classifications of university transportation

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by car, bus, train, and walking for the English in the years 2004 and 2009

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, at the beginning of the period, travelling by car made up the biggest part of the chart,

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rail transport was the least significant part of the methods of transportation.

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of the period, proportions did not change significantly, they were in a stability. The driving class of transportation was 51% in 2004 and experienced almost a quarter, which decreased to 28% in 2009.

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by bus accounted for 33% and had a growth of 13% in 2009.

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the beginning, cycling made up 9% of the

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percentage after that

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rose to 16% The categories

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traveling

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by train and walking were the smallest segments.

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, walking and rail transport were 4-3% in 2004 and both rose approximately 1-2% after 5year period.

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Methods of transporation for people travelling to one university for work or study in 2004 and 2009 in the UK. The two pie charts compare five categories of UK travelling percentage of university (train, bicycle, bus, walking, car,) from 2004 to 2009) Units are measured in proportion. al

Some people think that government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. why might this be the case? what could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

In the future it may be necessary for us to live on other planets. For this reason, some people believe that we should spend money now researching planets that could be a possible home, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

As the result of tourisms and the incresing number of people traveling, there's an growing demand for more flights. What problems does it have on the enviroment? What measures could be taken to solve the problem?

If old people are no longer physically, mentally or financially able to look after themselves, younger family members should be legally responsible for supporting them.