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The table below gives information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should ag

The table below gives information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should ag
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The table presents information about
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salary
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 and how much they got in 2009 by working at High School.
Generally
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 the table Compares five countries in
term
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 of their beginning, how it changed after 15
years
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,
maximum
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the maximum
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salary
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 and how much time they
spend
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 to reach
this
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 maximum
salary
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. The highest
salary
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 all the time had Luxemburg, beginning
with
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at
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 80,000
,
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after
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and after
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 15
years
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 was 119,000.
Also
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 maximum was 132,000. Australia had the lowest
salaries
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salary
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 28,000 after 15
years
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 with Korea they had
a
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the
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 same salaries 48 000,
that
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which
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 was
also
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maximum
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the maximum
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number of
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apply
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salary
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 for Australia. Korea’s high school
teachers
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teachers'
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salary
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 was
maximum
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62
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of 62
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 000. For Japan to reach
maximum
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a maximum
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salary
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86000
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of 86000
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 took 37
years
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 which is the greatest among other countries.
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 for Denmark to achieve
own
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its own
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 high
salary
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 needed only 8
years
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. After Denmark Australia spent one of the lowest
years
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 for its maximum
salary
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 9
years
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words salary, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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