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In some countries, there is not enough recycling of waste materials (e.g., paper, glass, and cans). What are the reasons, and what can be done to solve this problem?

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In certain countries around the globe, there is not
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sufficient
 amount of
waste
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 to recycle. Some
people
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 are not aware that some materials could be recycled and there are facilities
avaibale
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available
 to recycle those products. In
this
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 will be illustrated. First and foremost, some
people
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 are very busy in their
lifes
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lives
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 to think about recycling
of
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apply
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certain products like paper, glass and cans.
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, certain groups of society
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are
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 unaware of recycling units in their town, where they can recycle bottles and cans in exchange
of
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for
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 money.
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, some youngsters through everything in one
garbages
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garbage
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, because they are unaware of recycling
waste
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.
whereas
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, cardboard, boxes and paper are supposed to go into a blue bin. These blue bins are directly taken to recycling
facity
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facility
 to recycle
gardage
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garbage
garage
.
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, there there are solutions that can be
implimented
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implemented
 to
encougare
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encourage
people
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 to recycle as much as they
could
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can
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.
Government
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The government
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 should start a campaign, where they should give information about different garbage that goes into black and blue bins.
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 to that, they should advertise
location
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the location
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 of recycling facilities available in their areas.
This
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 solution will only work if common
people
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 take
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advice
 seriously. Authorities should
also
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 impose
fine
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 on the violators.
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, if some use black garbage
bin
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bins
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 for boxes or blue garbage
bin
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bins
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 for regular
waste
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, they should have to pay
fine
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a fine
the fine
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 for their violation. If individuals have to pay
fine
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a fine
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, it is
shure
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sure
 they will think twice to repeat that mistake again.
To conclude
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, there are
few
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a few
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 reasons why
people
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 are not recycling enough
waste
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. They are unaware
about
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of
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 recycling units, different
waste
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product
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products
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goes
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that go
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 to different bins and so on. The
soution
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solution
 for
this
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 is to aware
people
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about
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of
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 recyclcing and impose
fine
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fines
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 on
public
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the public
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 if they repeat
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the mistake
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 more than once.
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Improve the logical flow of ideas by ensuring each paragraph builds logically on the previous one. Use connectors and transitions to aid in this.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a well-structured introduction and conclusion, which helps in framing the discussion effectively.
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You've covered both the reasons for insufficient recycling and potential solutions, demonstrating a balanced approach to the task.
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