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The tables below give information about the consumption and production of potatoes in different world regions in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The tables below give information about the consumption and production of potatoes in different world regions in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The provided tables depict information about the production and consumption of potatoes in different types of
area
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 around the
world
 in 2016. At
the
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first glance, it can be obviously seen that Europe was a region that consumed the most potatoes among the surveyed areas, with 96,1
kg
 per person. Meanwhile, Asia/Oceania was the largest rice-producing region in the
world
, about 131,2 million tonnes in 2016. Focusing original attention on the first table, each European ate 96,1
kg
, which was the highest
among
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the
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consumption in the rest of the
world
. Following that was South & Central America, and Asia/Ocean when citizens in these areas consumed over 23
kg
 per person.
Finally
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least
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 potato intake was in Africa, with 14,1
kg
 per African. Turning to the remaining table, it can be observed that Asia/Ocean and Europe were the two major potato producers in the
world
, with 131,2 and 126,3, million tonnes, respectively. Standing at the second position was North America, with 24,7 million tonnes.
Finally
, Africa and South & Central America were
two
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 regions that manufactured the
least
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 potato.
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