Some claim that children are more aware of environmental issues than older adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that grown-up
persons
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are not as aware as
young
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the young
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generation
about
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of
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global warming. I totally
agrees
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agree
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with that statement because youngsters are being taught in school and adults have no
time
to look at these matters. On the one hand, These days every school children is being taught about global warming. they learn about
type
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of
pollutions
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pollution
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, how chopping more trees
affect
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us and how to tackle these problems.
Therefore
, every young child knows more in detail.
For instance
, In Pakistan,
group
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a group
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of young children from class eight in Karachi school
,
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called
the
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press conference to aware public about how trees are being chopped in Karachi city, and how it will create problems for
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generations. They
also
started
plantation
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drive to plant as many trees as possible and it was
also
joined by other institute students as well.
On the other hand
, most of the grown-ups do not even have
time
for discussing
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these issues. They are working hard to earn a meal for their family, by doing their job day and night. Their salary gets deducted when they take a day off from their
work place
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.
Therefore
their only focus is on one thing.
For example
, In Delhi city of India, people gathered for the global warming awareness program,
however
, when they were interviewed by
media
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the media
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, most of them complained about not being paid to make some
time
for these gatherings, and slowly every
peson
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person
was leaving,
therefore
this
program was cancelled within 3 days, which was supposed to take place for 10 days.
To conclude
, adults have no
time
for these matters because of their priorities,
whereas
, youngsters learn about these issues in their courses, they have more knowledge about it and
also
have
time
to work on it.
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The essay provides a complete response to the question, addressing both sides of the argument.
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Ensure consistency in verb agreement (e.g., 'is argued' vs 'agrees').
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The ideas are generally clear and conveyed comprehensively, but occasionally suffer from grammatical inaccuracies.
coherence and cohesion
The essay can benefit from a stronger logical structure by clearly separating the two viewpoints. Consider using more transition words or phrases to improve the flow between ideas.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction clearly states the main argument of the essay, indicating that children are more aware of environmental issues.
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The essay provides specific examples to support the main points, such as the initiatives taken by children in Karachi.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and reinforces the essay’s argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Conscious
  • Environmental studies
  • Tech-savvy
  • Firsthand experiences
  • Conservation efforts
  • Activism
  • Sustainable habits
  • Scarcity
  • Practical understanding
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