The bar chart shows the percentage of what people in four countries spent their money on in 2009

The bar chart shows the percentage of what people in four countries spent their money on in 2009
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The bar chart demonstrates the proportions of how much residents of four countries (the United
Stated
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, Canada, Great Britain and Japan) paid for different products and services in 2009. In each of the four nations, most of the money went to eating and drinking, accommodation, and transportation,
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far less on healthcare and clothing. The Japanese and Britons spent 23% and 20% of their earnings on foodstuffs respectively,
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the figures in Canada and the U.S. were around 15%.
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, Americans made the most investment in housing, with over a quarter of their income set aside for
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purpose. Surprisingly, their northern
neighbors
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, Canadians, stand at the lower end of the spectrum, at 21%. When it comes to transportation,
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, Canadians came out atop, having spent about
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of their money to
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end.
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, transportation fares accounted for the least spending in Japan (10%). Regarding the smaller shares, American expenditure on healthcare was the highest at 7%,
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the proportions in the other countries did not reach 5%. As far as clothes are concerned, items in
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category cost citizens of all these nations around 5% of their budgets.
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