The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate the portion of fruit and vegetable per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008

The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate the portion of fruit and vegetable per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008
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The bar chart illustrates the
proportion
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of men, women and
children
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consumed
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the portion of
fruits
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and
vegetables
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each day in 8 years between 2001 to 2008.
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, it can be seen that the
hightest
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highest
percentage of all people consuming
fruits
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and
vegetables
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was women
whereas
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children
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consistently accounted for the lowest
proportion
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.
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, a significant increase in
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proportion
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the proportion
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of people eating
fruits
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and
vegetable
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vegetables
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can be seen over the period of time. The percentage of
woman
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women
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who consumed
fruits
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and
vegetables
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started at just over 20% in 2001
then
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gradually increased to reach the peak of almost 35% in the year
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2006 , before falling slightly to 30% in the final year. In terms of men and
children
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eating
fruits
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and
vegetables
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, the rate
remainded
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remained
relatively stable in the first three years (about 17% and 15% respectively) . From
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point, the
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of men rose gradually to peak at about 27% in both 2006 and 2007, after which it dropped to about 26% . A similar
groth
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growth
can be seen in the figure for
children
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reaching 25% in 2007 and around 24% in the final year.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, children, fruits, vegetables with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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