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There 2 maps of Paradise Island in the past and the present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

There 2 maps of Paradise Island in the past and the present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
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The provided first map
illustartes
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illustrates
 the past of
Paradise
Island
,
while
 the second map
reflets
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reflects
 the current
Paradise
Island
.
To begin
 with,
Firstly
,
in
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on
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northeast
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the northeast
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side
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side,
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 there is a big beach
on
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in
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 the past and present;
however
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however,
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 swimming is permitted in
current
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the current
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 stage.
Secondly
, in
southeast
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the southeast
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 corner boat is converted into
cruise
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the cruise
a cruise
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.
Moreover
,
In
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apply
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the middle of
Paradise
Island
showed
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apply
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some deforestation and
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a scietific
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scietific
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scientific
 research
station
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stations
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 and natural
spring
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springs
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are
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have
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developed into many other facilities like
swimming
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a swimming
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 pool, hotel complex open
restuarant
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restaurant
, BBQ area, cycle path and cafe. On the other side,
sea
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the sea
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 on the south side and rocks on the northwest corner are unchanged. One new feature is added
on
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in
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 the southeast and it
named
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is named
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as
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apply
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Scenic
lookout
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Lookout
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.
Overall
, it can be
seem
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seen
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 easily that there
is
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are
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 so many
additionally
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additional
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 services
are
Unnecessary verb
apply
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added
in
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to
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 the current
Paradise
Island
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words paradise, island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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