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The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up- to-the minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts.

The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up- to-the minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts.
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The illustration shows the operation mode of
Australian
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the Australian
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 Bureau of Meteorology about how to collect the newest weather
information
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 and produce reliable forecasts.
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,
this
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 process is divided into 4 key stages, including incoming
information
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, analysis and forecasting, preparing the broadcast and
finally
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 the broadcast. Advanced equipment and scientific analysis
method
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 were
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 in each stage.
To begin
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 with, original
information
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 and data are collected from 3 different sources, satellite, radar and drifting buoy, output the satellite photo, radar screen and synoptic chart respectively, which have a significant impact on later calculations and predictions. In the third and fourth
stage
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stages
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, computers will perform precise calculations and analysis on various images and
information
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, and
then
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 make predictions on the recent weather in every
regions
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 of Australia, which will be broadcasted through various channels
such
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 as TV
newsreader
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newsreaders
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, radio and recorded announcement in order to make sure widespread public knowing the
information
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 to arrange daily plan.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words information with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 5 times.
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