Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter: •Give details of the food and services you ordered •Describe the problems that occurred •Explain what you want the restaurant to do

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
letter to
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express
my annoyance regarding the service I had
last
night in your beautiful
resturant
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restaurant
. In fact, yesterday I had
a
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company and I recommended your place, so we
orderd
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ordered
2 dishes of rare stake with a special salad and my best friend wanted to have a Kebab with rice and for the beverage, it was 2 red wines with
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diet coca, as I remember.
although
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the design and environment
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awsome
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and the food was incredibly delicious, there was a big problem which made me
embarressed
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embarrassed
, it took you about 45 minutes to serve the meal and we were all starving and as I was the host, everyone asked me whether they serve it soon or not and they really made me uncomfortable. Actually, I guess the main reason for
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mistakes is the fact that there are not enough workers that can get over 20 or more people at the same time,
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they did their best, I think you need to not only employ more waiters, waitresses and chefs
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but
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train them to be fast in serving and ordering in order to make people satisfied. I hope my letter finds you fine and
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your career. best regards, Parmida.
Submitted by parmida.kharazi on

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coherence cohesion
Consider dividing ideas clearly into separate paragraphs to enhance readability.
task achievement
Add more detail to convey deeper insights about the dining experience.
suitable writing tone
You maintained a respectful and professional tone throughout your letter.
complete response
You clearly described the situation and your expectations from the restaurant.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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