The tаble and charts below give information оп the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in опе агеа of Britain. The tаЬ/е shows where the топеу сате from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information Ьу se/ecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where re/evant

The tаble and charts below give information оп the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in опе агеа of Britain. The tаЬ/е shows where the топеу сате from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information Ьу se/ecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where re/evant
The table and pie chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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data about the police budget from 2017 to 2018 over a
one year
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period in one particular place
of
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United
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the United
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Kingdom. The table represents the money’s origin and the pie chart demonstrates the money’s distribution.
Overall
,the police budget came from in two years between 2017 and 2018 was from national government and local taxes,
whereas
the police finances were spent on salaries and technologies mostly. It is noticeable that there was a slight growth of 2.3 m from 175.5 m to 177.8 m in the finance of
National
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government.
Moreover
,the money of local taxes rose by 11.1
million
from 91,2
million
to 102,3
million
. Meanwhile,the budget from other sources like grants
were
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approximately equal to 38.5
million
in two years. It is
an
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interesting to note that there was a stable unchanged in 17% in buildings and transport in both years.
Furthermore
,there was a sharp increase in technology from 8% to 14% in 2018,
whereas
the spending money on
the
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salaries,which was the highest of all pie charts,
were
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down sharply falling from 75% in 2017 to 69% in 2018.
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