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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The maps show the Pacific Railway Station in 1998 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The maps show the Pacific Railway Station in 1998 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given maps depict the changes
of
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in
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 Pacific Railway
Station
 in 1998 and now. It
is
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has
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 seen
a great changes
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great changes
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. In 1998 there were only four railway lines.The infrastructure was quite undeveloped. There
were
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was
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 only
one
 shop,
one
 cafe, a small ticket office and separate toilets.
Nevertheless
,
this
station
 is perfect for
sparsely
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a sparsely
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 populated town. Nowadays,
current
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the current
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station
 is extremely expanded. There are already seven
platform
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platforms
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,
instead
 of four. The opportunity for customers to have a break after
long
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a long
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 road or to buy stuff that will be useful
in
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on
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 the train became much better. The new
station
 consists of two shops,
one
 big supermarket, where you can buy everything you need. And
one
 of the most important things
,
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apply
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 is
really
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a really
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 huge ticket office. It means that
it
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there
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 might be
less queue
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fewer queues
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 inside.
Furthermore
, a great restaurant was built, it is a great place to have a rest or to eat some tasty food. To
conlude
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conclude
, for about 25 years,
station
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 received
a huge changes
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a huge change
huge changes
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 that increased the flow of people.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words station, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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