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The below table shows information and prediction regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.

The below table shows information and prediction regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.
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The table illustrates the
percentage
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 of the
population
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 aged 65 and over in three countries (Canada,
Germany
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 and the
UK
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) in between 1988 , 2000 and an estimated
percentage
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 for 2030.
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, the
population
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 of elderly
people
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 is predicted to rise in all three countries over the period given. The highest
percentage
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 of older
people
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 was in
Germany
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 which is forecast to continue to remain the highest for the entire period
while
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 the lowest proportion can be seen in the
UK
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According to
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 the table, between 1988 and 2000 the
percentage
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 of aged
people
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 in
Germany
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 and Canada went up by 5% to 25.32% and 20.67%
repectively
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respectively
.
On the other hand
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UK
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the UK
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 showed relatively
ittle
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little
 change in
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population
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the population
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 of 65
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years
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 old or above remaining at just under 15%. By 2030, it is expected that the
population
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 of
people
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 aged 65 will increase by approximately 5% in all three countries. The
percentage
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 is predicted to reach 26% in Canada, 20.42% in
Germany
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 and 20.35% in the
UK
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.
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