The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries.

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
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The line graph illustrates the export percentages of Australia with Japan, US
China
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and India from 1990 to 2012.
Overall
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, on the one hand, India and
China
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were the lowest and rose later with
China
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having a rapid increase.
On the other hand
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, Japan and
US
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the US
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started on a high note and plummeted
at the end
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.
China
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was the lowest from the start and as well
at the end
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while
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the US was second lowest from the start and the highest
at the end
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. From 1990 to around 2000
China
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and India had the lowest and constant percentages of below 5%.
China
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ended in 2012 being the lowest with around 6%. Japan had the highest percentage in 1990 at about 27%, had a decrease in 1995 and went down to around 19%. It had a constant fall up until 2012 when it was the second highest with around 18%. Though it started as the second lowest in 1990 with about 3%, it
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had the greatest increase and ended up having the highest percentage in 2012 at 30
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words china with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Percentage
  • Exports
  • Trend analysis
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Peak performance
  • Decline
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Inferred
  • Global events
  • Economic context
  • Reflect
  • Influence
  • Patterns
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