The bar chart shows the number of people employed in five types of work in one region of Australia in 2001 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons.
The bar chart
showed
that from 2001 to 2008 there Wrong verb form
shows
are
an increase or a decrease Correct subject-verb agreement
is
of
various types of Change preposition
in
works
including sales, accounting, computing, nursing and farming. Among other types of Fix the agreement mistake
work
work
, sales always become the most job
of Correct word choice
common job
people
in Australia. There are about more than 150.000 and 160.000 persons in 2001 and 2008, respectively. There are slight increasement
Correct your spelling
increase
of
Change preposition
in
people
who work
in this
job
. Less
Change the quantifier
Fewer
people
interested Add a verb
people are
people were
to
Change preposition
in working
work
on Farming between 2001 to 2008. there are only 20.000 persons or less. This
may be due to
lowest
amount of money that they can earn from Add an article
the lowest
this
job
compared with others. Computing and Nursing share the same trend of Correct article usage
the numbers
numbers
of Fix the agreement mistake
number
people
who worked
in these Wrong verb form
work
jobs
. More people
seem to be more interested to
Change preposition
in working
work
in these jobs
in 2008 than in 2001. this
was shown by a slight increasement
in Correct your spelling
increase
bar
chart. Among other Add an article
a bar
the bar
jobs
, accounting tend
to be Change the verb form
tends
most
stable in the number of Correct article usage
the most
people
who worked in this
job
between 2001 to 2008. Overall
, the bar chart exhibits various types of jobs
in Australia in 2001 and 2008.Submitted by putri on
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, job, people, jobs with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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