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You are moving to a new country ,write a letter to the accommodation agency to rent a house In your letter describe Yourself and your family Which area you would like to live in And what facilities you need in the house.

#country #accommodation #agency #rent #house #area #facilities
Dear Officer, I
moving
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moved
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 your country
last
 week. I
do
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have
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 not
find rent
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found
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 a house. I researched
a
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the
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 ınternet
I
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and I
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saw your
acommodation
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accommodation
ageny
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agency
. I just moved to your country because I will be working in the UK office of the company I work for. I have a child but for the time being my wife and my child are not moving to
UK
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the UK
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. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 my wife will find a job in
UK
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the UK
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 soon
that is
 why I am looking for a house in a large and good
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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. I want to big and clean garden because my
soon
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son
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 likes to play outside. The house must have at least three rooms and the kitchen must be large.  I am a good tenant. My
soon
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son
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 is not a naughty child. I would never be late with my rent and leave the landlord in a difficult situation.  I sent you references of the previous owners by e-mail, you can check them there. I am waiting for your answer.
King
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Kind
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 regards,
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grammar
Make sure to proofread for minor grammar and spelling errors, such as 'I moving your country' instead of 'I moved to your country' and 'accommodation agency.'
content
Include more specific details about the location you would like to live in, such as neighborhood names or proximity to certain landmarks.
content
The letter effectively covers all required points: your personal situation, the family details, the area preference, and the facilities needed.
tone
The letter maintains a polite and formal tone, appropriate for a communication with an accommodation agency.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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