On one hand, nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. On the other hand, nuclear weapons are a potent threat to world peace. Do the benefits of nuclear technology outweigh the risks? Give your opinion and support it with reasons.

Nuclear provides the lowest capital and clean waste,
however
, it has
potential
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to be used as a
weapon
that threatens world peace. Based on those facts, I believe the benefits still outweigh the drawbacks because the world needs sustainable
energy
and the government can make policies to prevent the misuse of nuclear. First and foremost, nuclear categorized as sustainable
energy
and it is eco-friendly. Unlike other energies,
such
as oils and coals, nuclear
produced
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by some atoms in the lab and not by fossils,
thus
, the intelligence can reproduce it.
Additionally
, because it does not need fires to process it, it has almost zero waste and
good
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for the environment.
For example
, in some cities in Indonesia that
use
nuclear
as
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a power generator, the quality of water and air is better than
other
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cities that
usecoals
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use coal
because nuclear only produces
small
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amount of waste.
As a result
, nuclear can be considered as an
energy
substitute.
However
, there are drawbacks to nuclear
such
as its
use
as a
weapon
. People can
use
nuclear as a bomb because it contains massive power
that is
enough to damage a whole country.
For example
, the tragic World War Bombs in Nagasaki and Hiroshima which used nuclear, not only killed thousands of people, but the radiation can still detected in these areas until now.
Due to
these facts, nuclear is dangerous if it is used as a
weapon
.
To conclude
, nuclear is a sustainable
energy
,
however
, it has
potential
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to
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as a
weapon
.
Although
that, I believe that the benefits still outweigh the drawbacks because the government can prevent the misuse of nuclear by creating policies that emphasize the prohibition of nuclear weapons.
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