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Your local council has decided to close the only park in your town and build a car park in its place. You believe this will have a bad effect on the people who live and work in the town. Write a letter to the mayor. In your letter introduce yourself explain why you think the decision is wrong say what you think the council should do instead

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to inform the authority that the
decesion
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decision
of building
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 a car
park
 at the
park
 is wrong. I would like to
hade
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have
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a
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light on
this
. My name is Pramod and I am living in unit 104 on Charl
st
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. I am working as a software developer at Apple Inc. I have been living in
this
 community for 5 years and
this
park
 is necessary for the local
people
. And
this
park
 has become an integral part of
people
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life
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. As I am a fitness
freek
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freak
, I do jogging every day in the
park
.
However
, I noticed that many
people
wants
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 to do excercise at the
park
 but lack of fitness
equpment
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equipment
 and a proper trail way around the
park
,
they
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so they
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 avoid
goint
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going
 to the
park
.
Futher more
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Furthermore
, there is mud
at the end
 of the side and the chain of the swing is rusty
whcih
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which
 is not safe
as a result
 parent do not bring their child to the
park
. I would like to give a few
suggstions
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suggestions
 to
impprove
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improve
 the condition of the
park
insted
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instead
 of
bulding
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building
a
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parking.
Park
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The park
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 can be revived by
maintaning
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maintaining
 it
regulary
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regularly
.
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, It would be great if there
is
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was
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 a dedicated trail for running and walking for adults which
will
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would
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 not only bring
lot
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a lot
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 of
people
 into the
park
 but
also
improves
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improve
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 the health of
the
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every individual. Hoping to take my suggestions into
the
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consideration. Your Faithfully, Pramod
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task achievement
The letter addresses all parts of the prompt, but could benefit from clearer justification on specific points, especially alternative solutions.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph contains a single clear idea to enhance readability.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow by using connecting words to transition smoothly between sentences and paragraphs.
task achievement
The letter provides a complete response by touching on all required points: introduction, explanation of the decision's negative impact, and alternative suggestions.
coherence cohesion
The letter closes appropriately, maintaining a polite and formal tone throughout.
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