Your local council has decided to close the only park in your town and build a car park in its place. You believe this will have a bad effect on the people who live and work in the town. Write a letter to the mayor. In your letter introduce yourself explain why you think the decision is wrong say what you think the council should do instead

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing

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letter to inform the authority that the

decesion

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decision

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a car

park

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at the

park

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is wrong. I would like to

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have

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apply

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light on

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. My name is Pramod and I am living in unit 104 on Charl

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. I am working as a software developer at Apple Inc. I have been living in

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community for 5 years and

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park

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is necessary for the local

people

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. And

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park

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has become an integral part of

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people

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life

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. As I am a fitness

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, I do jogging every day in the

park

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, I noticed that many

people

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wants

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to do excercise at the

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but lack of fitness

equpment

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equipment

and a proper trail way around the

park

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they

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so they

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avoid

goint

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going

to the

park

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Furthermore

, there is mud

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of the side and the chain of the swing is rusty

whcih

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which

is not safe

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parent do not bring their child to the

park

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. I would like to give a few

suggstions

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suggestions

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improve

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park

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insted

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instead

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building

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parking.

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Park

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can be revived by

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maintaining

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regularly

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Further more

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, It would be great if there

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a dedicated trail for running and walking for adults which

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not only bring

lot

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people

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into the

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but

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improves

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the health of

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every individual. Hoping to take my suggestions into

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consideration. Your Faithfully, Pramod

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task achievement

The letter addresses all parts of the prompt, but could benefit from clearer justification on specific points, especially alternative solutions.

coherence cohesion

Ensure each paragraph contains a single clear idea to enhance readability.

coherence cohesion

Improve the logical flow by using connecting words to transition smoothly between sentences and paragraphs.

task achievement

The letter provides a complete response by touching on all required points: introduction, explanation of the decision's negative impact, and alternative suggestions.

coherence cohesion

The letter closes appropriately, maintaining a polite and formal tone throughout.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

245 words

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